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Their fingers press... by ~timmyjp:icontimmyjp:



Their fingers press

Curving feathered wings
Angelic. She, with skin
Just as fair, as the angels sing.

In sparkling coats
Of glittering steel. He said,
No true beauty before he’d seen.

Between them
Glass and ripples of silenced water.
Pearly fish flash, silver
Yellow and blue.
Pools and coral set between.

Against glass, their fingers press.

Time leads on and expressions fade,
But not for these
Two star-crossed lovers.

Later by her step; their wind
Kissed hair, floated
On the loving breeze.
As she, dressed with wings;
Watched him creak and vanish,
As mother called.
With a sparkle.
Gone.

From where he dropped,
Her balcony she waits.
Crying;

‘Oh Romeo, Oh Romeo, where for art thou Romeo.’

Tim Peacock
©2006
12/6/2006
©2006-2009 ~timmyjp
:icontimmyjp:

Author's Comments

I just found this, I'm not sure if I like it or not.

Inspired by Romeo & Juliet of course, from quite a while back.

Good, or no good? You tell me!

Timmy
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:iconangel-lithium:
I really like that. It has a secial kind of vibe to it, I can't quite describe

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Poisoned hearts will never change
:icontimmyjp:
Thankies :)

It's slightly different to what I usually write, in form and metre, if not in any other way!

Thanks again,

Timmy
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:iconwonderbug634:
Very lovely. Nice imagery too :)
:icontimmyjp:
Thanks :)

Timmy
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:iconviris:
Plus points for submitting poetry, coz I like your poetry.
Minus points for basing it on something by Baz Luhrmann. Further minus points for getting the last line wrong
=P 'Oh Romeo, Romeo...'

Other than that, its standard timmy fare - pretty imagery and content. Not your best though.

xxx

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"Ten years before, she would have been considered pretty; now, with lines around her mouth and the stain of persistent dissapointment in her eyes, she was almost beautiful."

from "The Dumb House" - John Burnside
:icontimmyjp:
Nah, I've never rated it to be honest. Just one of those things that I churned out.

Timmy
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:iconchowding:
good, very good, but you reminded me i have english coursework to do you bastard! lol

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BOOOOOOOOOOOBIES

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